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| Beartalon |
Posted: Wed Feb 19, 2003 4:04 am Post subject: 1 |
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| Sorry - I don't have time to be in this round. |
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| Termital |
Posted: Sun Feb 09, 2003 8:53 pm Post subject: 0 |
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I just specified rhyming. You get to pick the way, be it aabb, abab, abba, abcabc or whatever. Just not aabcbdeffag please . |
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| Sofis |
Posted: Sun Feb 09, 2003 12:31 pm Post subject: -1 |
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About the meter, yes. About the rhymes, do you mean it has to be built out of rhyming couplets and no other rhyme scheme is acceptable? It has to be AABBCCDDEEFF and so on, with an X somewhere if there is an odd number of lines? ABACBCDCDEDEAA wouldn't do, for instance?
[This message has been edited by Sofis (edited 02-09-2003 07:32 AM).] |
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| Termital |
Posted: Sun Feb 09, 2003 3:49 am Post subject: -2 |
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If you use an odd number of lines, you may leave an out-of-rhyme line in the start, middle, or end.
I'm expecting the stresses to go like
sSsSsSsSsSsSs sSsSsSsSsSsSs
Clear now?
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| Beartalon |
Posted: Sat Feb 08, 2003 2:58 pm Post subject: -3 |
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13 rhyming lines. So twelve have to rhyme and we can end with a variant, or do we have to vary a rhyming scheme to include the thirteenth?
Iambic meter. This poem will kill me. |
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| Sofis |
Posted: Sat Feb 08, 2003 12:59 pm Post subject: -4 |
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| in iambic thirteen syllable metre |
Clarification please - last time I checked a iamb consisted of two syllalbes, the first of which is unstressed, the second of which is stressed. So how does iambic sesquihexameter work? |
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| Termital |
Posted: Sat Feb 08, 2003 10:21 am Post subject: -5 |
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First of all, I'm sorry for all the delay. I've been trying my damndest to entice people to vote, but have still failed. Seeing that even the Chinese Ney Year celebrations have past, it is now time to move this on to the next round..
The poets are feeling a little more confident now, seeing that they survived a round. The proccess is repeated in the much familiar manner, and when all voting is done, only werebear is left in the arena. He's facing the about-to-be-opened porticullis with some confidence. After all, he is a bear. He can surely give that tiger a run for his money, maybe even win. As the doors open, he sees a sole human figure coming out of shadow's shroud with an odd limp. Could it, can it possibly be.. Werebear speaks his last haiku as he is locked in battle with wordcross's half-eaten zombie. Needless to say, only one of them could die, and that was werebear.
Next subject is horror, of any sort. Form is a minimum of thirteen rhyming lines in iambic thirteen syllable metre.
Also, I would like your opinions as to whether it would be a good idea to move this thread in OT or EI, where more audience may see it and vote. This contest is becoming much too inbred for my liking.
[This message has been edited by Termital (edited 02-08-2003 05:31 AM).] |
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| Werebear |
Posted: Fri Feb 07, 2003 1:52 pm Post subject: -6 |
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The muses' light fades A purple shroud on this thread Darkness covers all |
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| Sofis |
Posted: Fri Jan 31, 2003 12:15 pm Post subject: -7 |
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Unofficial count, not counting votes for self:
| Sofis | 37 | 9 votes: 1x2 2x3 1x4 5x5 | | Hitchhiker | 29 | 9 votes: 2x2 3x3 4x4 | | Beartalon | 25 | 9 votes: 1x0 2x2 3x3 3x4 | | Werebear | 21 | 9 votes: 1x1 5x2 2x3 1x4 | |
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| Hitchhiker |
Posted: Fri Jan 31, 2003 6:07 am Post subject: -8 |
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I dunno who Hithchiker is, but she got 11 points.  |
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| Werebear |
Posted: Wed Jan 29, 2003 2:16 pm Post subject: -9 |
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| Please include the NUMBER of votes a poem received too. |
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| Beartalon |
Posted: Tue Jan 28, 2003 4:38 pm Post subject: -10 |
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UnheardVoice: you're right. The three poems were evocative of my feelings one morning, and they all make sense taken together if you knew what scenario I was thinking. #3 makes no sense without #2.
Termital: Time for a tally, I think. It's been three days since the last post, and we've all voted. |
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| NOT Werebear |
Posted: Sat Jan 25, 2003 1:45 am Post subject: -11 |
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Um, 5 for Werebear, -5 for all the rest. 
NOT Werebear. Nope, nope, nope nope nope nope nope nope. |
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| VinnyQ |
Posted: Fri Jan 24, 2003 4:48 pm Post subject: -12 |
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Sofis: 4 Hithchiker: 4 Beartalon: 3 Werebear: 2
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| Hitchhiker |
Posted: Fri Jan 24, 2003 6:11 am Post subject: -13 |
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Sofis: 5 - Simply sublime 'Talon: 3 - for the middle one; evocative Werebear: 2 - cute |
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| UnheardVoice |
Posted: Fri Jan 24, 2003 5:28 am Post subject: -14 |
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Beartalon: 0 - If the poet had the 2nd haiku by itself, then it would have gotten a higher score. The 1st haiku's 3rd line isn't the best of imagery, for this theme, at least. And I'm afraid the 3rd haiku just doesn't make sense, at least to me.
Sofis: 5 - Not only was there excellent imagery (enough to make an entire scene), but the poet takes full advantage of the haiku structure.
Hitchhiker: 2 - I believe that the 2nd haiku's last two lines could have been improved for a better score.
Werebear: 2 - Good composition, but not extraordinary.
------------------ Music is the traveller crossing our world, Meeting so many people, bridging the seas... ~ I'm Just a Singer (In a Rock and Roll Band), The Moody Blues
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| Termital |
Posted: Fri Jan 24, 2003 4:13 am Post subject: -15 |
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This has stalled long enough, so I'll just give it another day in a visible spot, and then tally results. Now's the time to get all your friends to shamelessly give everybody fives (5 for you, -5 for the rest to be exact ).
If anybody feels like it, read post #82, and rate as many haikus as you feel from -5 to 5. It's that simple! |
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| Termital |
Posted: Mon Jan 20, 2003 1:25 am Post subject: -16 |
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bum-bum-baba-bump baba-bumbum-bum baa bump bumbum -ba-ba-bump Bump!
--- And Vote I said Vote you please Vote
[This message has been edited by Termital (edited 01-19-2003 08:27 PM).] |
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| PuzzleProdigy |
Posted: Fri Jan 17, 2003 5:35 pm Post subject: -17 |
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I have already rated these poems. All works of art, truly great things. |
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| Termital |
Posted: Fri Jan 17, 2003 3:41 pm Post subject: -18 |
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If you're reading this, scroll up a few posts back, read the one containing all submission and rate as many as you feel like from -5 to 5! And that's an order! 
*wanders if moving this thread to OT or EI would produce more voters* |
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| Termital |
Posted: Wed Jan 15, 2003 2:16 am Post subject: -19 |
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As thread drops lower, it is only too proper to bump it back to top. |
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| Sofis |
Posted: Mon Jan 13, 2003 12:00 am Post subject: -20 |
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I suppose it's impolite to get points from my fellow poets without giving any back. Under the assumption that the rules from reply 60 apply:
Beartalon 4 (For the middle haiku, really. I think it would have made a better stand-alone, though it's dubious it could have been called seasonal on its own). Hitchhiker 3 Werebear 2 |
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| PuzzleProdigy |
Posted: Sun Jan 12, 2003 10:58 pm Post subject: -21 |
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The judging will be stricter next round, I promise...
Beartalon: 2 Sofis: *makes "over my head" gesture* 2 Hitchhiker: LOL! 4 Werebear: 2
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| Beartalon |
Posted: Sat Jan 11, 2003 6:52 pm Post subject: -22 |
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| BUMP - I don't want to let this move to page two... |
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| Werebear |
Posted: Thu Jan 09, 2003 4:27 pm Post subject: -23 |
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My votes -
Sofis - 5. Excellent. Hitchhiker - 4. Funny. Beartalon - 3. don't depress yourself, 'Talon!!! Werebear - I don't vote for myself unless our votes are ADDED and not AVERAGED, in which case I'll give myself a 2, one below my own lowest vote. Dragon Phoenix - -5  |
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| Werebear |
Posted: Thu Jan 09, 2003 4:23 pm Post subject: -24 |
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| Faugh... and I purposely substitued "too" with "real-life" because I thought I was one short. *Beats self with punctuation stick* too late now. |
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| Beartalon |
Posted: Thu Jan 09, 2003 9:54 am Post subject: -25 |
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Sofis: 5 - evocative imagery Hithchiker: 4 - made me laugh Werebear: 3 - so different from mine, hard to score Beartalon: 3 - I depress myself
[This message has been edited by Beartalon (edited 01-09-2003 04:54 AM).] |
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| Dragon Phoenix |
Posted: Thu Jan 09, 2003 9:41 am Post subject: -26 |
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And who says it was a haiku?
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| Sofis |
Posted: Thu Jan 09, 2003 2:20 am Post subject: -27 |
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Originally posted by Werebear: Haven't checked VG in some time, been "real life" busy - Haiku to come soon
Werebear, the second line of a haiku has seven syllables, not eight.
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| Werebear |
Posted: Thu Jan 09, 2003 1:40 am Post subject: -28 |
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(DP, the first line of a haiku is 5 syllables, not 6)
will vote tomorrow. |
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| Dragon Phoenix |
Posted: Wed Jan 08, 2003 1:55 pm Post subject: -29 |
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Sofis 5 (for the vivid imagery)
Beartalon 4
Hithchiker 3 Werebear 3
As I walk through the park A snowflake kisses my head This year will be great! |
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| kevinatilusa |
Posted: Wed Jan 08, 2003 7:04 am Post subject: -30 |
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Scores without comments (for now)
Beartalon: 2 Sofis: 3 Hitchhiker: 2 Werebear: 4
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| Werebear |
Posted: Wed Jan 08, 2003 4:42 am Post subject: -31 |
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| If I can't have fun as well as fulfill the requirements, then why play? |
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| casinopete |
Posted: Wed Jan 08, 2003 12:48 am Post subject: -32 |
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my preferred method of judgement is to pick my favorite and rate that one. (although for Werebear this is of course inadequate) so:
Beartalon:
I gave you a gift You asked for the sales receipt Love unwrapped, tossed out
this is quite simply superb: 4
Sofis:
Pig's blood tinting snow bearded men, pleading to gods Please give back the sun.
outside the box, every word packed: 3
Hitchhiker:
"Thank you for the gift!" (I hope it's not that fruitcake I gave you last year...)
hilarious, has the most haiku-ish feel of the entrants (imo; i'm certainly no expert): 3
Werebear:
Holidays, busy A time to buy gifts for all Planning, cleaning, work
Puzzles, games, are late In times like these it happens Not too big a deal.
Except I forgot Something I wish for all you - Sits in these haikus.
very cute, pleasant, i think the "hidden" message probably constrained you too much, though: 1
please note, i take the -5 to 5 seriously, so consider these votes a 10,9,9,7 out of 11. |
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| Hitchhiker |
Posted: Tue Jan 07, 2003 9:06 pm Post subject: -33 |
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But it's a very nice thought. Even if Pablo already has it.  |
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| Sofis |
Posted: Tue Jan 07, 2003 7:20 pm Post subject: -34 |
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This time, I'll refrain from making it obvious . |
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| Werebear |
Posted: Tue Jan 07, 2003 6:57 pm Post subject: -35 |
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| I think I'd prefer to call it The Hidden Wish. *G* |
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| Termital |
Posted: Tue Jan 07, 2003 1:39 pm Post subject: -36 |
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Yay! All are in! Time to get the votes rolling! As usual, all you reading this may rate as many of the haikus as you like from -5 to 5, by posting here/e-mailing me/IMing me/astrally projecting your thoughts/whatever.
Beartalon:
Seasonal Feelings
Christmas is lonely For those without family Darkened heavy hearts
I gave you a gift You asked for the sales receipt Love unwrapped, tossed out
Paper, tape, ribbons And bow to mask my sad eyes Wrapping for the hurt
Sofis:
Midvinterblot
Pig's blood tinting snow bearded men, pleading to gods Please give back the sun.
Hitchhiker:
Office Party
Boss wears mistletoe Topless file clerks table-dance Who spiked the eggnog?
"Thank you for the gift!" (I hope it's not that fruitcake I gave you last year...)
Werebear:
[Why I'm late excuse]
Holidays, busy A time to buy gifts for all Planning, cleaning, work
Puzzles, games, are late In times like these it happens Not too big a deal.
Except I forgot Something I wish for all you - Sits in these haikus.
[This message has been edited by Termital (edited 01-07-2003 08:43 AM).] |
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| Werebear |
Posted: Tue Jan 07, 2003 1:10 pm Post subject: -37 |
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Holidays, busy A time to buy gifts for all Planning, cleaning, work
Puzzles, games, are late In times like these it happens Not too big a deal.
Except I forgot Something I wish for all you - Sits in these haikus.  |
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| The DogPack |
Posted: Tue Jan 07, 2003 12:02 am Post subject: -38 |
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The following were found in the out tray at Asimere Kennels Inc. From the paw-work we deduced the authors, and give a potted summary of their personalities.
LoopyDog: Brit Upperclass Twit red setter Tinselled tree aglow With Christmas lights; now burning LD lifts a leg.
ChienFou: French poodle, earthy, d'une age certaine Va encore en France Pour celebrer Le Noel CF baise BS
AhoInu: Hard-working studious Japanese AhoInu queues hours To get a ticket (Oh Joy) For Beethoven's Ninth |
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